Thursday, October 25, 2007
Introducing the Student Essays
For the four essays chosen in today's class, write a short introduction (50 to 75 words) that would help to interest a reader in devoting the time to reading the full essay. You should write at least one, but can write more than one if you wish. Write on your favourite, of course.
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Cleaning the Well by Valentina
Well described and edited story about simple but hard work of cleaning the well.
After reading this you might feel the enjoyment of festive ritual as if you were there as one of them.
A small girl’s affection toward her father-‘I looked at him as my hero’-is well expressed.
Good piece of writing! (Second draft 61 words)
"A Special Summer Ritual" written by Hai Yan Yan is a interesting essay about Chinese tradition. The author described the process in her family detailedly. This Festival is for the dead,for the soul of the family's ancestor.The lanterns and lights guided their ancestor back home to accept the descendant's respect and enjoy the offerings. A big banquet was given for the living.The festival processed in a solemn and cheerful atmosphere.At the midnight,all of the family over China lit the lantern to guide the ancestor go. They put their lanterns on the river or lake to lighten the back way for their ancestors to the other world. Do you think it's a interesting ritual? But now,it perished away.
“The Neptune Festival ” by Victoria is an interesting essay about a teen’s discovery of a ritual in his grandmother’s village. Although he has no idea about the festival, he is excitedly participating in the process of preparation which takes place at night, so nobody will learn that there is anything going- on in the village. This really is an enjoyable essay to read.(63 words)
The Impact of First Impression
Make yourself a gift: read the story; it's from heart.The plot is original. I came from the same area, but I never heard about this way of cleaning the well. Valentina focus in an ancestral ritual, showing a memorable way of life. She evokes unique moments from her childhood with nostalgia. It is a memorable world of tradition, nature and passion. Enjoy it!
Here are our revised versions from today's class:
Masaru's shortened version:
Cleaning the Well by Valentina
Well-described and edited story about the simple but hard work of cleaning a well.
Reading this, you will enjoy a festive ritual as if you were there. Read more . . .
Zarghoona's shortened version:
“The Neptune Festival ” by Victoria is an interesting essay about a teen’s discovery of a ritual in her grandmother’s village. Read the essay to find out how the villagers prepare everything in secret overnight. (35 words)
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