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Hi, Renuka
can you give the name of that essay we selected "...unhealthy beauty", I forget about the exact title
The title is "The Modern Women’s Unhealthy Beauty"
Hey Everyone,
Where are your introductions? I'm curious! See you in class on Thursday.
Discussion member: Mia, Sonya, Larry, Makkassia, Eve
“The Impending Danger that Awaits Us” is about global warming and we chose it because it is persuasive and has lots of scientific details and evidences that are supportive and approvable.
“The Modern Women’s Unhealthy Beauty” has a new look on the women’s beauty issue. The essay is well-organized, clear in language, and full of scientific and supportive evidences.
On “The Addiction to the Fuel”
People like driving for the convenient. While the fuel price goes high, they take bus like the pro- green. While the fuel price goes down, they are going to drive immediately without any hesitation. By these familiar phenomena around us, the author satirically points out that they are addicted to fuel.
The author also reveals a big embarrassment of the human society. On the one side, we cost a lot of money for the “convenient”; on the other side, we are getting the global warming and exhausting the resources. What is the way out? All of us must think about it. Without taking any measurement, we will go to the moment that either we cannot afford the fuel any more or our fuel resources run out of.
Through the common facts the author discloses the conflict in our life vividly. The reason is clear, but we often ignore it. The author did.
Thanks for the comment, that is really encouraging for my essay "Addiction to Oil"
For the first look, Eve`s essay seems pretty strong: her gammer is good; the words choice is logical and accurate; even the whole essay smells of a certain writing style of mature and sarcastic by distaining the positive attituade towards getting rid of oil addiction.
However, I`m quite uncertain about her point of view; I don`t quite understand if she is trying to persuade the public to disregard the effects of global warming and concerntrate on personal satisfaction. She twisted the original intention of Brad`essay to persuade people to live greener and healther into completely chaning the living style which is not possible for any of us.
I don`t see her points of view clearly but the extramism of ideology.
Imitate Eve’s point of view
Some people say that we should eat less meat in order to: first, improve our own health; second, reduce the emission of carbon dioxide, third, leave some mercy to the animals which are also created by God.
However, none of us is capable of becoming a complete vegetarian, plus we all enjoy the great taste of beef, pork and mutton and getting benefits from their proteins; therefore, let’s be realistic, enjoy the slaughter of animals and addict to animal’s meat, as much as possible.
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