Hello, everyone.
I have a question for Brad about the SIMILE I use in this essay, "How I write." I put the question and drafts into the comment place. So, could you give me a brief answer for it? And everyone, I'd like to read yours, too.
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How I Write: The Rule for Writing
On the first day of the essay writing class, the teacher emphasized the way of writing. “Don’t confuse your readers. Convince them!” From that moment, the instruction became my writing policy. The following methods are the principles of how I aim for a clear writing.
Profound thinking elaborates a specific writing. I put much time for thinking, brainstorming, to seek the objects of a piece of writing. Having a pencil and a bunch of papers, I scribble the words as if I ponder over a crossword. Eventually, those words convert into the sentences, which build up the framework and contents. During the revision, I visualize the readers, considering about the sensible organization and the needless words. In a dilemma, I replace and remove the words to refine my writing.
Careful reading supports a polished writing. After the first draft, for example, for an essay, I switch myself to the reader to analyze it. Checking each topic sentence, I examine whether it relates to the main idea. As I reread all the sentences singly, I can gain a chance to recognize the obscure, incomplete phrases. Being a cautious reader helps me amend the weakness and leads me to define my writing.
The use of dictionaries is a reliable way to look for effective words. In the course of writing, I always keep several dictionaries by my side: an American, a British, a Canadian, and two English-Japanese. Normally, I need only a few of them, but when I doubt a word that may be improper to the sentence, I use all. It’s like an investigation into the word—detecting the truth and the evidence. Consulting the dictionaries provides me the solution with additional information and the examples, which assists me in confirming the operation of the word.
The methods direct me to maintain an intelligible writing. I pursue the basics to let the reader understand the idea of my writing.
318 words; third draft
Simile:
“I scribble the words as if I ponder over a crossword.”
“It’s like an investigation into the word—detecting the truth and the evidence.”
Antanagoge:
“ I need only a few of them, but when I doubt a word that may be improper to the sentence, I use all.”
(The annotated draft)
On the first day of the essay writing class, the teacher advised. “Don’t confuse your
readers. Convince them!” [From that moment, the instruction became]
my writing policy. The following methods are the principles of how I aim to improve a clear writing.
Profound thinking elaborates a specific writing. I put much time for thinking, brainstorming, to seek the objects of a piece of writing. Having a pencil and a bunch of papers, I scribble the words [as if I ponder] over a crossword. Eventually, those words convert into the sentences, which build [up] the framework and contents. During the revision, I visualize the readers, considering about the sensible organization and the needless words. In a dilemma, I replace and remove the words to refine my writing.
Careful reading supports a polished writing. After the first draft, for example, for an essay, I switch myself to the reader to analyze it. Checking each topic sentence, I [examine] whether it [relates] to the main idea. [As I reread] all the sentences singly [,] I can gain a chance to recognize the obscure, incomplete phrases. Being a cautious reader helps me amend the weakness and leads me to define my writing.
The use of dictionaries is a reliable way to look for effective words. In the course of writing, I always keep several dictionaries by my side: an American, a British, a Canadian, and two English-Japanese. Normally, I need only a few of them, but when I doubt a word that may be improper to the sentence, I use all. It’s like an investigation into the word—detecting the truth and the evidence. Consulting the dictionaries provides me [the] solution[s] with additional information and the examples, which assists me in confirming the operation of the word.
[The] methods [direct me] to [maintain] an intelligible writing. I pursue the basics to let the reader understand the idea of my writing.
318 words; second draft
The question:
I’m wondering whether “as…if” can be accepted as simile.
How do you think? (please check the 1st body paragraph)
Hi, Ritsuko,
I think it is a simile and I'll post my essay soon.
Ritsuko,
Yes, you can use a simile with "as" and the rule is "When a verb or phrase is compared to a verb or phrase, as is used."
I'd like "I scribble the words as if pondering over a crossword" as a suggested revision.
See you tomorrow.
Heeey Ritchan, I'm just saying hello.
I've already told you I'm impressed with your piece, so, well, see you tomorrow.
And I like your comment on Harjit's essay, too.
Hi, everyone
I haven't read your essays yet, but
I'm already impressed by the time you posted them.
Great!
So then, I'm going to read yours.
Thanks for your comments.
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