Take one of the following disgusting ingredients:
blood, spit, vomit, urine, feces
Write a scene (setting) that contains one of the ingredients and write it to make us feel disgusted and then write it a second time to make us feel it is acceptable. (50 to 100 words maximum for each)
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Disgusting
The blood ran from his mouth, dripped off his chin, pooled on the floor under the chair. The dull metallic smell of freshly spilled blood filled his nostrils.
But not for some creatures!
His victim slumped on the chair, the slight, pale vampire felt the blood run from his mouth, drip luxuriously off his chin. Ah the smell of it! It reminded of him younger days, his first kills, the power he felt, the dark power of the night.
Non-disgusting:
He stared out the window at the street cars, the Thunderbirds with their oversized tail fins, and the businessmen with their tidy suits and fedoras.
"Such a normal spring day out there", he thought. "Anything but normal in here."
The carryings on in the hallway outside his door of the psych ward was unfortunately a common occurrence.
Just then, Nurse Hilliard knocked and came in.
"Mr. Jamison, how are we doing this morning?"
"How do you think?"
"Did we have a bowel movement today?"
He motioned towards the bedpan. Nurse Hilliard checked it. Yes, it contained his feces.
"Wonderful! Looks like you may not need that operation after all!"
His eyes brightened.
"And you'll probably be released tomorrow. Lord knows we need the extra bed, and you've been so patient with us having to move you up here while the hospital's going through renovations."
He looked at her and smiled.
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Disgusting:
He stared out the window at the street cars, the Thunderbirds with their oversized tail fins, and the businessmen with their tidy suits and fedoras.
Inside, there were carryings on in the hallway outside his door of the psych ward, unfortunately a common occurrence.
Just then, Nurse Hilliard knocked and came in.
"Mr. Jamison, how are we doing this...?"
Nurse Hilliard's mouth dropped open. She stared all around the room. His feces was spread everywhere: on the bed, all over the walls, on the floor, and on himself.
"Mr. Jamison, this really has to stop."
He said nothing. He just stared at her with a blank expression, his eyes glazed over.
Nurse Hilliard sighed. "It will be quite some time before he's released," she thought sadly, shaking her head, "poor soul."
"I'll be back to clean this up," she told him.
He looked at her with those glazed over eyes and smiled.
-Disgusting in acceptable way:
When she asked to open the corpse at her med school, she felt like vomit. As she was about to do it, she felt something was coming up from her stomach, but she swallowed it, when she about to swallow it, it came up right away. And, she felt good after that incident.
53 words.
-Disgusting in unacceptable way:
When she was called to open the corpse, I was next to her and she didn’t look so good. Her face was all pale, and she started to sweat so badly that I thought she must’ve missed to go to the washroom before coming to the morgue. But, as she went up to the corpse, she stopped and looked down for a minute, and as she about to do it, she backed up a while, and she vomited right in front of me! And, her inside stuff were coming out like when it was a Christmas morning, wrapping papers all over the place. When I looked all of them moved to the back, and I was the target.
115 words.
Disgusting
I couldn’t help but stare, the red flowing syrup of life had me shook. His arm was vomiting blood, splurging out as if it didn’t belong there. The thickness of the fluid just running down his arm; dripping off each lifeless finger.
42 – Words
Acceptable
And there I was, helping. I was giving the best gift of all, my blood. My arm stretched out with shiny silver needle piercing into my vein leading into the clear plastic, it hurt but it was worth it, my soul juice was leaving to heal another in some way.
50 – Words
Disgusting
Toby moved into our neighborhood a month ago. He is a tall, slim and black guy. He greets me friendly whenever we bump into each other.
However, I noticed his strange behavior; he was licking his own throw up.
It was gross!
What’s more? Ken, the owner of that dog, just stood there and didn’t do anything about it. (61 words)
Acceptable
Kate has been feeling awful for the last few days—extremely tired, nauseous.
It felt like the flu she had before. It concerned her because of H1N1 flu that’s been going around.
Middle of breakfast, she ran to the bathroom and started throwing up.
All of sudden, unspeakable joy arose in her mind despite the painful vomit.
Kate has become anxious and excited thinking that she might be pregnant.
(69 words)
Blood,disgusting
The metallic smell of blood hit my nostrils the moment I entered the room , the amount of blood determined whether the victim was wounded or dead...definately dead.
I could see bloody drag marks on the hardwood floor, not only was he dead he was being disposed of .
49words
Acceptable..
blood is known as the gift of life.
To suffer a grave blood loss one becomes very cold and sleepy ..if its your time to die its not a bad way to go , if it is not your time the gift of life is a blood transfusion.
47words
Disgusting:
Once I had a dream: a white man in an army camouflage uniform, carrying a red and white striped flag with his left hand and an AK 47 with his right hand. In front of him were naked men and women, hanged on a noose, in a cypress tree. Blood were gushing out from their slit throats, swollen mouths and open wounds. The white man caught some spurting blood of his victims with his face, and tasted it; he licked his lips and did the Italian gesture (as if saying magnificent). He grinned.
Not so disgusting:
Once I had a dream: George W. Bush, hanged on a noose, in a cypress tree, blood streaming down from his slit throat, swollen mouth and open wounds. “ God bless America!” He yelled. “ No one can hear you here,” someone replied. “ I’ll burn you later.”
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