Locate all the writing you've done since September 2007. *By this I imagine that some of it needs a bit of searching to find; perhaps it's on the blog only; perhaps you've not shared it or shown it to anyone before.
Categorize what you find: is it a first draft?; is it worth working on?; is it phony or forced in any way?; has it been published?; is it the best that you can do?; how well do you use our five senses in the writing?(can a reader imagine the setting easily, for example, in more than one sense?) *This is for your sake. I don't expect to see or know about this step at all. You are trying to find your best in order to do the one revision below and to choose the pieces (5-10) you will present to me in your portfolio. It's up to you!
Write detailed comments for one piece that needs work and is worth the effort. Be brutally honest (If it doesn't work, readers won't buy what you are saying. You'll lose them!) Write up your comments in a short essay.
Take your own advice and rewrite the piece. Make it the best you've done all year.
Choose between five and ten pieces from the year. Word process them, using 12 point text size, double spacing and an indent for each paragraph. Title everything clearly and refer to the exercise or technique where you first began to work on the piece.
Be sure to follow correct form; for example, when inserting dialogue make a new paragraph for each new person speaking. And, of course, punctuate the dialogue correctly!
Write another short essay; in it, describe three things you've learned in Writing 12 this term and how they apply to your current and future success in writing.
Submit all the above to me by May 31. I will comment, but will not proofread (correct mistakes!) and will remark on it if your errors are frequent. A professional presentation (clean text, neatly assembled in a folder of some kind) with minor and very few errors will gain higher marks.
For that indefinable quantity called style, it's subjective. I'll do my best. Remember that I will evaluate your whole year as well in my calculations. Good attendance, participation in all its forms, will get its just reward.
Thanks to all of you for making it happen this term.
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I have questions:
How many wards are you expecting in the “short essay”? 200? 300?
And it should be a standard form essay? Like, intro, three body paragraphs, plus conclusion? Or free style?
By the way, I’ve got the passport today! I’m so surprised. Very quick for Canadian government standard!
And I agree with the photo selection. It’s better not to show the picture with people.
Hiromi,
Essay should be a standard form (just to make it easier for me to follow) and 300 words is plenty!
My daughter got her passport, too! The gov't was training 500 new evaluators for passports and they were about to begin work last I heard. I bet they did . . .
Sweet Sautéed Bananas
Summer has been here; the backyard or picnic parties should happen frequently. What do you thing? Make some juice taste snacks -Sweet Sautéed Bananas. Of course, it is easy to cook. Yummy.
Ingredents:
3 tablespoons unsalted butter
1/4 cup brown sugar
1/4 cup dark rum
4 large bananas, peeled and sliced in half pinch of cinnamon or allspice
Direction:
Place all ingredients (except bananas) in a large skillet over medium heat. Mix well. When it starts to get bubbly, and bananas and sauté gently about 3-4 minutes. Cool slightly and serve over vanilla ice cream.
A Curse or an Orientation
Tylor More lived in an isolated village with about 100 people for thirty years, which surrounded by a massive desert. Mystically, nobody in the village had ever stepped out of the desert. Villager said there was a spell on them to stay in the village.
One day, Backey Smith, a brave reporter, visited the village and interview Tylor, “The tranquil village is lovely. Do you think the people really satisfied living here without any interest to see the outside world?” Tylor gave a bizarre look and answered, “No! There is a curse on this village; we just can’t get out off the dessert, no matter how hard we try.”
“How come? Would you show me?” Backey asked curiously.
The next day, they well prepared to set out into the desert. Tylor leaded Backey and made marks along their ways, and they did this for four days. It is funny that they went round and round back to the village.
The fifth day, Backey realized the problems and suggested, “Tylor you need orientation to get out of the desert. Come and follow me.”
They prepared again, this time they changed to travel at night time instead, they constantly face the North Star’s direction. They rested at day time.
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A miracle occurred after three days later. A splendid green land, a busy town revealed in front of them. Tylor was skipping on the lawn and humming a brisk song toward the town.
According to the story, things you don’t understand are mysteries or curses, if you know them, which become science or knowledge. Setting up orientations will guide you to your goals.
First draft, 280 words
Hi Olivia,
What a lovely article you wrote. Very intertaining with a good style. Thank you.
Natalia
Thank you for your comments,Natalia.
See you tommorrow.
If you know two wonderful names, Gerald Durrell and James Herriot, you are already happy. If you don’t, you have a great excitement of knowing them waiting ahead.
The Books We Like (Gerald Durrell’ and James Herriot’ animal stories)
Unfortunately, all my life I had to be a pet lover without any pets. By reading Gerald Darrell’ and James Herriot’ animal stories, I found a way to satisfy my desire to love and to know animals.
Durrell and Harriot …They were two very different people, and yet they had many things in common. Both had outstanding personalities with a great sense of humor and a rich life experience. Both were determined about career in early age and devoted their life to our “little brothers”. They managed to accomplish a lot during their life and made a noticeable positive mark on the Earth. Both were not professional writers by any account; however, they were so gifted, that their books were among the top bestsellers. The translations of their books into Russian language were among the few possessions that my family brought to Canada and the books by these two authors were the first that we bought here in Canada.
James Herriot (1916-1995)
This was a pen name of James Alfred (Alf) Wight, a British veterinary surgeon, famous for his worldwide popular semi- autobiographical stories mostly known as “All Creatures Great and Small”. Based on his fifty years of practice, his books are about hard and happy life of a country veterinarian and are always about animals. His “animal stories” are heartwarming, often humorous, sometimes sad, but always optimistic.
My personal favorites include: “All Creatures Great and Small”, “Harriot’s cat stories”, and “Herriot’s favorite dog stories”.
Gerald Durrell (1925-1995)
He was a naturalist, zookeeper, wildlife conservationist and a writer. Since his early childhood, he had a passion for “all creatures great and small” often keeping different animals, birds, reptiles and even insects as pets. He wrote a number of very popular books based on his adventurous life. Durrell himself claimed that his first spoken word was zoo. Among his life achievements are the foundation of the Wildlife Conservation Trust, Wildlife Canada Preservation, and Jersey zoo, the main purpose of which was to preserve critically endangered species.
My favorite books are: “My Family and Other Animals” (his childhood autobiography), “The Bafut Beagals”, “Fillets of Plaice”, “The Drunken Forest”
If you know two wonderful names, Gerald Durrell and James Herriot, you are already happy. If you don’t, you have a great excitement of knowing them waiting ahead. Enjoy!
426 words, first draft
Green onion and Seafood Pancake
Last Sunday it rained cats and dogs. In a rainy day I prefer to stay home and enjoy listening the rain drops onto my window. Easily, I recollect my old days about the green onion and seafood pancake that my mother used to cook in a rainy day. The green onion and seafood pancake is well harmonized with a rainy day. I open the refrigerator and collect some vegetables, frozen shrimp, seafood mix, and pancake mix; flour and seasoning such as garlic powder, black pepper powder, salt, and baking powder. The dish will be a perfect light meal for bored rainy afternoon.
Ingredients (for 4 person)
2C pancake mix
3-4 green onion
30g shrimp (frozen)
50g seafood mix or oyster, squid (frozen)
1 small onion
3-4 mushroom
100-150g zucchini
1 egg
1.5-2C water
Salad oil (any kind )
Sauce for dip; 2T soybean sauce, 1/2T vinegar, sesame, lemon slice
Directions:
1. Pour the pancake mix into a big bowl, add some water, make batter just like a little bit more dence than hot cake batter.
2. Slice finely vegetables, cut the seafood.
3. Mix egg, vegetables, and seafood with the batter.
4. Add 1-2T salad oil onto the preheated pan, spread 1-2 ladle of the batter. 2minutes later, turn it over.
Tips:
* you like hot taste, mix chopped red pepper with the batter.
* If you like cheese flavor, sprinkle with grated Mozzarella cheese on the pancake just after finish cooking.
* You can find the pancake mix at the TNT or Korean market however, you can use flour instead of the mix.
Hi Natalia
Thank you very much for your thoughtful feedback on my portfolio.
Your new article attracts me since I've been similar to your situation--I don't have pets but am a pets lover! I'd like to read the books you recommend.
So, I'm wondering if I could get a little more imformation about your favourite books as well as the authors. I'm very curious!
Hi Rosaria,
Thanks for your feedback; you've given me many comments since we'd started English 11 together. I like your specific advice.
By the way, thanks for the Korean pan cake recipe. Is this "Chijimi"?
We can also add KIMUCHI, too, right? I'm very happy to learn this recipe. It's my favourite Korean food. I already printed out it.
See you on Tuesday!
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